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Quarter Moon Waning (by: eddy styx)

I am on target,
trembling in
anticipation brewing.
I fear a tempest
on the horizon.
Clouds pregnant
with tears not shed
perhaps, if...
I run fast enough,
far enough,
I can out distance them?
Staring into the black
of night, only
the faint light of
the quarter moon
meets my eye.
It clicks in.
By this light
I shall hunt...
When I howl,
they will be aware
knowing not what
to expect
as the blood
begins to stir!

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The poem "Quarter Moon Waning" presents a vivid and engaging narrative. The use of metaphors and descriptive language, such as "clouds pregnant with tears not shed," effectively evokes emotional imagery. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter to enhance its musicality and flow.

The poem's theme appears to be anticipation and fear of an impending event, possibly a conflict or challenge. This theme is effectively conveyed through the use of words and phrases such as "trembling," "fear a tempest," and "shivering as the blood begins to stir." The poem could further explore this theme by delving deeper into the speaker's emotions and thoughts.

The use of the first-person perspective helps to create a sense of immediacy and personal connection. However, the poem could benefit from a clearer development of the speaker's character to enhance the reader's understanding and empathy.

The poem's structure, with its short lines and stanzas, contributes to the sense of tension and urgency. However, the poem could benefit from a more varied line length to create a more dynamic rhythm and pace.

The use of the moon as a symbol is effective in creating a sense of mystery and foreboding. However, the poem could further develop this symbol to enhance its thematic depth and complexity.

The poem's ending, with its reference to a howl, effectively conveys a sense of impending action or conflict. However, the poem could benefit from a more definitive resolution to provide a satisfying conclusion.

Overall, the poem demonstrates a strong command of language and imagery. With further refinement in rhythm, character development, and thematic depth, it could become even more engaging and impactful.

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odds and ends in punctuation and capitals, but I love your mood! Seems to fit the mood of Mother Nature these days.
Sullen bitch! Nice stuff eddy, ~ Geez.

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I think she has lost her frigging mind! thanks for the read and comment. I shall try to repair this tomorrow. I am to pooped to pop...

*ever, eddy styx

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