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About You...

About You...

something in the way

you take my hand

caress my cheek

gaze into my eyes

breathe my name

kiss my throat

fondle my nape...

we undulate

oscillate

modulate

tangled limbs

of a work in progress

Something about you causes

my mouth to dry

breath to catch

pulse to race

body to sing...

The chorus

of the music of our souls

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

The story told is a one of love and unity with another. Excellent pace and word usage. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

I'm listening to the guess who right now...
thank you for always being supportive of my work! you are a true friend!

*love & hugs, Cat

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author comment

I love the title.
The poem is about two lovers that felt the warmth of their bodies when they were together.

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

you are right.

always, Cat

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It’s great. I’m late getting on tonight. But yeah!!

you don't mean to tell me, that you have a life outside of Neopoet? lol

*hugs, Cat

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The title, the flow, the story...all wonderful!

Join in our collaborative poem workshop. Each member will have a chance to write two stanzas at least four lines each. The stanzas must be relative to the poem.

thank you RoseB. I appreciate your reading and commenting :)

*hugs, Cat

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And responds, please be courteous
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author comment

and erotic love verse. Generally short and graceful in form and typically dealing with themes of love and affection.

Beautifully penned piece!
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"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

I appreciate your comments!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

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