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Waiting in line

I am waiting in line
counting the days
carrying in my mind
how precious that is
with memories capturing
at the presence stage
from the hourglass
time is the essence of life
with each breathing moment
is a blessing from each
learning lesson
taking on different tasks
from various rides
A reminder to live
life to the fullest potential
without any second
thought of regret
As if last given chance

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The poem "Waiting in line" explores the concept of time and the importance of living life to its fullest potential without regrets. The imagery of waiting in line and counting the days effectively conveys a sense of anticipation and reflection. The references to memories, the hourglass, and learning lessons add depth to the theme of time and the value of each moment.

One suggestion for improvement could be to consider refining the structure of the poem to enhance its flow and coherence. This could involve revisiting the use of punctuation, line breaks, and stanza organization to create a more seamless reading experience. Additionally, further developing specific imagery or metaphors related to waiting in line and the passage of time could enrich the overall impact of the poem.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys a reflective and contemplative mood, and with some adjustments to structure and imagery, it has the potential to further engage and resonate with readers.

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Hello, Hon,
What an interesting thought! Our time on this Earth compared to a "life line" of sorts. "...from the hourglass, time is the essence of life." Very cool!
Thank you!

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