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On the Road

On the road
I travel alone
In a far distance
through out
life journey
up and down
crossing the path
I take life experience
to carry myself back
up to walk again
on a steady pace
to leave a memory
of the footprint
on this planet
a reflection of time
to learn that there
is every emotional ride
to different locations
comes with lessons
of an on going to
search for reasons
to reach the destination

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "On the Road" presents a journey as a metaphor for life, a common theme in literature. It is effective in conveying the sense of a solitary journey, with the repeated use of the first-person singular pronoun.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of punctuation. The lack of punctuation makes it difficult to follow the poem's rhythm and understand its meaning. For example, the line "of an on going to search for reasons" could be clarified with the use of commas or other punctuation marks.

The poem also uses a lot of abstract language, such as "life experience," "emotional ride," and "lessons." While these terms are not inherently problematic, they can make the poem feel vague. The use of more concrete imagery and specific examples could make the poem more engaging and relatable to the reader.

The poem could also benefit from a more varied use of line lengths and rhythms. The current structure of the poem is somewhat monotonous, which can make the poem feel repetitive and less engaging. Varying the line lengths and rhythms could help to create a more dynamic and engaging reading experience.

Lastly, the poem could explore its central metaphor in more depth. The idea of a journey as a metaphor for life is a powerful one, but the poem does not fully explore the implications of this metaphor. Expanding on this idea could make the poem more thought-provoking and impactful.

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Hello, Hon,
On the road of life! I traveled along with you through the many phases and stages of life, very much enjoying reaching one's own personal destination.
Thank you!
L

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