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My First Internet Memory-Google Search

My first internet memory
this brings me to the
introduction of the
tutorial study through
the google online
surfing with the
fascinating of
opportunity to acquire
for a learning desire in
a science technology
of today’s global world
This interest starts from the
online searching to discover
unlimited learning ability tools
like an encyclopedia collection
with the resource information
for one share a broad
knowledge of understanding
through the adventure of
Internet Explorer with many
interesting selecting topics

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "My First Internet Memory-Google Search," is a reflection on the poet's initial experiences with the internet, specifically with Google. The poem effectively conveys the sense of wonder and discovery that comes with first exploring the vast resources available online.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. Firstly, the language and structure of the poem could be refined. Some lines are quite long and could benefit from being broken up into shorter, more digestible phrases. For example, "the google online surfing with the fascinating of the open the door to share a learning desire for the advanced technology inventive in today’s global world society" could be divided into smaller, separate ideas.

Secondly, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While it does a good job of conveying the general sense of discovery and learning, it could be more engaging if it included specific examples or anecdotes about the poet's experiences. For example, instead of saying "like an encyclopedia book collection with boundless resource information," the poet could describe a particular piece of information they discovered or a specific moment of realization they had while using the internet.

Lastly, the poem's rhythm and flow could be improved. The poem currently reads more like prose than poetry, and could benefit from more attention to rhythm, meter, and perhaps the incorporation of poetic devices such as rhyme or alliteration. This would help to make the poem more engaging and enjoyable to read.

Overall, while the poem does a good job of conveying the poet's initial experiences with the internet, it could be improved through refining the language and structure, incorporating more specific imagery, and paying more attention to rhythm and flow.

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