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Overdraft is a bad habit
like an addiction to alcohol
that cause toxic waste
with all the excessive
spending to give away
with a loss of mind
a sense of guilt
feeling a shared burden
to go broke overnight
shocking news comes
in tears of flow and
heart of attack
with a warning sign
a lesson not to forget
never to be careless
to always stay on track
for financial advice

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The poem "Overdraft" presents a clear and compelling metaphor, comparing the dangers of financial irresponsibility to the destructive nature of alcohol addiction. This analogy is effective in conveying the emotional and psychological toll of financial mismanagement.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The lines vary greatly in length and syllable count, which can disrupt the flow and make the poem feel disjointed. For example, the line "with a loss of mind" is much shorter than the surrounding lines, which can be jarring for the reader.

The poem also contains some phrases that could be clarified or refined. For example, "heart of attack" is presumably a play on "heart attack," but the meaning is unclear. Similarly, "in tears of flow" is a somewhat awkward construction that could be simplified to "in flowing tears" or rephrased entirely for clarity.

The poem's message about the importance of financial responsibility is clear, but the final lines could be more impactful. Instead of simply stating "never to be careless," the poem could show the consequences of carelessness or suggest a more specific action for the reader to take.

Overall, the poem effectively uses metaphor to convey its message, but could benefit from more consistent rhythm, clearer phrasing, and a stronger conclusion.

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