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Time

Submitted by Clentin on Sat, 2023-03-11 09:02

Tic Toc tic tok tic
Seconds pass by each minute
Causing a new day

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2023-03-11 15:57

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this is a different universe, I think that the seconds pass by each minute. Of course, if you want to stick with that statement of minutes pass by, each second? I think that might work. The placing of a comma might make a difference here.
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Clentin

Sat, 2023-03-11 18:21

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Thank you yes, I need a revision. A simplistic thought on the day we change time

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Geezer

Sat, 2023-03-11 18:51

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about anyone else, but I hate the change of time every year. Let's just leave it the way it is.
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