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Nature Speaks

Nature speaks in silence
From sunlight until sunset
Hours and minutes comprise each day
Letting us decide what actions we will take
Time is her choice about life and death
We are given the option to do our best
Each having a given hour that is unknown
Awaiting her call for us to return home
When that hour arrives we will have our book read
Depicting our achievements and our faults
She will point us in the direction we created

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The poem "Nature Speaks" provides a contemplative exploration of the human relationship with time and nature. It effectively uses the metaphor of nature as a silent, omnipotent entity that governs life, death, and the passage of time.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of imagery and metaphor. For instance, the metaphor of time as a book is introduced in the penultimate line, but it is not developed or connected to the rest of the poem. Developing this metaphor further or integrating it more seamlessly into the poem could enhance its overall coherence and impact.

Additionally, the poem could be improved by varying the sentence structure and rhythm. The current structure is quite uniform, with most lines consisting of a single clause. Experimenting with different sentence structures could make the poem more dynamic and engaging.

Finally, the last line of the poem is somewhat ambiguous. The phrase "what our future will be" could be interpreted in many ways, and it is not clear how it relates to the preceding lines about life, death, and time. Clarifying this line could strengthen the poem's overall message and emotional impact.

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Hello, Clentin,
What a beautiful opening line! Hmm...and then the reader sees a list containing a bit of, more or less, information. I would love to know how and what the poet feels from the silence, the relationship to nature and what stirs the heart and belly. After all, these are our "hours and minutes" as the poem suggests, and I would love to know what thoughts and feelings are generated within that time. I'll be back!
Thank you!

Thank you for reading and comments, I appreciate it very much

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Hello Clentin.

Indeed, she will point us in the direction we created, for better or worse. I fear the latter.

Well written thoughtful poem. Thanks for sharing. - Will

Thank you for reading and comments

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