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Spring rays surprise the land
Releasing the grip of winters hand
Flower once asleep now bloom
Releasing us from the cold days gloom

Birds are heard singing above
Encouraging us to laugh and love
The Spring colors of the new day
Permits us to run and play

We can rejoice during this time of mirth
To appreciate the beauty of the earth
To watch our children laugh and sing
We thank our Lord for the new Spring

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The poem successfully utilizes a consistent ABAB rhyme scheme, which provides a rhythmic flow to the verses. The theme of spring as a period of renewal and joy is clearly and effectively communicated throughout the poem. However, the language could benefit from more vivid and unique imagery to further engage the reader's senses and emotions.

For example, instead of the general phrase "Spring rays surprise the land", consider using more specific and evocative descriptions of the spring sun's effects on the landscape. Similarly, instead of "Flower once asleep now bloom", the poem could delve deeper into the transformation of specific types of flowers or plants from their winter dormancy to spring bloom.

The last two lines introduce a religious element that wasn't present in the rest of the poem. If the intention is to convey a sense of gratitude or reverence for the beauty of spring, it might be more effective to weave this sentiment throughout the poem, rather than introducing it abruptly at the end. This would provide a more cohesive and impactful exploration of the theme.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition. For instance, the words "laugh" and "sing" are used twice in close proximity, which can make the poem feel repetitive. Experimenting with synonyms or related concepts could enhance the poem's richness and depth.

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