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Short

Life comes, and then quickly, it is gone

All in all, it does not last all that very long

In just one day, you can live a lifetime

Either trapped outside or inside your mind

Turn around it is gone before you even know

The longer time passes, the shorter it grows

Anyway, you look at life, it is just ephemeral

Couldn't get through it without my Demerol

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Comments

Excellent use of the word and conveying its meaning throughout your poem. The line "in just one day, you can live a lifetime" stood out to me. Great job.

~RoseBlack~

Thanks. I must admit this one was a struggle.

author comment

you are making it through the struggles. Your work gets better all the time. Keep on keeping on! ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

author comment

Maybe think of removing the comma after Anyway. (just a thought)
I'm sorry you struggle. Keep writing it will help.
Mark

If not now when!
Someday I'll be a poet.

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