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Short
Life comes, and then quickly, it is gone
All in all, it does not last all that very long
In just one day, you can live a lifetime
Either trapped outside or inside your mind
Turn around it is gone before you even know
The longer time passes, the shorter it grows
Anyway, you look at life, it is just ephemeral
Couldn't get through it without my Demerol
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Comments
RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-11-18 08:27
Well done
Excellent use of the word and conveying its meaning throughout your poem. The line "in just one day, you can live a lifetime" stood out to me. Great job.
~RoseBlack~
Depressed 1
Fri, 2022-11-18 08:48
RoseBlack
Thanks. I must admit this one was a struggle.
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-11-18 10:33
Glad to see...
you are making it through the struggles. Your work gets better all the time. Keep on keeping on! ~ Geez.
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Depressed 1
Sat, 2022-11-19 05:50
Thanks
Thanks Geezer I am trying.
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Depressed 1
Sun, 2022-11-20 06:32
Thanks
Thanks Mark
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