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Rain Drops

Rain Drops on My Face
Drenched in nature’s sweet embrace
Cleansed by the storm’s grace

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Rain Drops" is a haiku, a form of traditional Japanese poetry. It follows the 5-7-5 syllable count, which is a common structure for English-language haikus.

The poem uses nature imagery to convey a sense of peace and renewal. The first line, "Rain Drops on My Face," sets the scene and introduces the theme of nature. The second line, "Drenched in nature’s sweet embrace," expands on this theme and introduces the idea of being enveloped or surrounded by nature. The third line, "Cleansed by the storm’s grace," concludes the poem with a sense of renewal or rebirth.

However, there are a few areas that could be improved. The phrase "nature’s sweet embrace" is somewhat clichéd. It might be more impactful to use more specific imagery that evokes a unique sensory experience. Additionally, the word "grace" in the third line is somewhat vague. It might be more effective to use a word that more directly conveys the transformative power of the storm.

Overall, the poem effectively uses the haiku form to create a vivid image and convey a sense of peace and renewal. However, it could be improved by using more specific and unique imagery.

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a great Haiku! Very nicely done. ~ Geez

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Thank you. I do like haiku form. I want to try others as well
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thank you for the lovely thoughts.

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you for reading and commenting. I read your poems, I find them quite enjoyable.

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