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I'd like to be invisible
How much fun you think it'd be
If they couldn't see you
when you pinched their knee?

Sometimes I really wonder
what do people do
when no one is about
I'll bet you wonder too

But peeping in on people
is rude, or so they say
So, I guess that when they're looking back
I'll return another day.

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The poem "Peeper" is a playful exploration of the idea of invisibility and the curiosity about what people do when they think no one is watching. The poem uses a conversational tone and simple language, making it accessible to a wide range of readers.

One area of improvement could be the rhythm. The poem seems to aim for a rhythmic, rhyming structure, but it doesn't consistently adhere to it. For example, the second and fourth lines of the first stanza have a different number of syllables, which disrupts the rhythm. Consider revising these lines to create a more consistent rhythm throughout the poem.

The theme of the poem is clear and engaging, but the final stanza could be strengthened to provide a more satisfying conclusion. The current ending leaves the reader hanging, without a clear sense of resolution. Consider revising this stanza to bring the poem's theme to a more definitive conclusion.

The poem also uses humor effectively, particularly in the first stanza. However, the humor becomes less prominent as the poem progresses. If humor is a key element of the poem, consider incorporating more humorous elements in the later stanzas.

Finally, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery. While the concept of invisibility is inherently abstract, the poem could use more concrete images to help readers visualize the scenarios it describes. For example, instead of simply stating "when you pinched their knee," the poem could describe the reaction of the person being pinched, which would create a more vivid and engaging image.

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Hello, Geezer,
Fun fantasy! This feels like a sprite with a moral compass is in the room! Very nice.

I don't know about moral compass, but don't want to get arrested! LoL

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Enough mischief to make it fun without breaking the law...sometimes I would like to peep on certain people just to freak them out cuz they can't see me lol


Hi Geezer, nice poem, well worked and your focus on the subject matter is excellent. My only query is, in the last two lines:

"So, I guess that when they're looking back
I'll come back another day."

As you've used the word back closely to each other it kind of tripped me up a little. Perhaps, I'll return another day? Only a suggestion, Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

I think I will used that. Thank you, ~ Geez.

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