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Our Neopoet Family
Our family is born of many parents
A family close, yet living far apart,
Sons and daughters of poetic verse
A family born of common heart.
This family is a finely blended one
Siblings with diverse and varied views,
Dispersed across this globe of ours
Family members we get to choose.
The written words our family writes
Speak to the landscape of our times,
And challenge all that read our works
To enjoy themselves within our rhymes.
Members of our poetic family
Not bound by blood or other means,
Yet secured by tethers born of prose
Writing words of hopes and dreams.
The reader completes the poet's work
Without a reader there is no poem,
As words that sit without being read
Are merely thoughts without a home.
Our many doors are always open
We're so glad you came our way,
Wondrous poems are just inside
Pull up a chair, enjoy your stay.
Comments
neopoet
Fri, 2024-01-26 19:41
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Our Neopoet Family" effectively uses the metaphor of a family to describe a community of poets. The metaphor is consistently maintained throughout the poem, which contributes to the coherence of the piece. The poem also uses a clear and straightforward language, making it accessible to a wide range of readers.
However, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. For example, instead of saying "Siblings with diverse and varied views," the poet could describe specific views or perspectives that these siblings hold. This would make the poem more engaging and provide a deeper understanding of the community being described.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme of the poem are generally consistent, which contributes to its musicality. However, there are some lines that disrupt the rhythm, such as "Members of our poetic family." Adjusting these lines to fit the rhythm could improve the flow of the poem.
The poem's theme of the importance of readership in poetry is well-articulated, particularly in the lines "The reader completes the poet's work / Without a reader there is no poem." This effectively communicates the poet's perspective on the relationship between the poet and the reader.
In conclusion, while the poem effectively uses metaphor and communicates its themes clearly, it could be improved by incorporating more specific imagery and ensuring a consistent rhythm.
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William Lynn
Sat, 2024-01-27 11:49
Hello Mark. I appreciate you
Hello Mark. I appreciate you reading the poem and I like your suggestion. I'll get it edited in a few.
Many thanks, Will
Candlewitch
Sat, 2024-01-27 13:35
hello Will,
a very nice thought as a collective functioning family. I really like these lines:
This family is a finely blended one
Siblings with diverse and varied views,
Dispersed across this globe of ours
Family members we get to choose.
good luck with the contest. Hugs, Cat
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William Lynn
Sat, 2024-01-27 18:46
Hi Cat.
Hi Cat.
I think many of us a a family member, or two, that we can only shake our head at when we learn the latest thing they have said or done. It's nice to be able to choose our family members!
Thanks as always for reading and commenting. Say "howdy" to Steve for me. - Will
Candlewitch
Tue, 2024-01-30 08:31
Dear Will,
Steven says Hello back! (I call him Steven, or 3#$%$@ LOL! you can call him anything you please :)
*hugs, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Lavender
Sat, 2024-01-27 18:19
Our Neopoet Family
Hello, Will,
Eloquently stated. Feels right! I especially like the 5th stanza, "The reader completes..." Once a poem is written, its purpose and drive is to "go out there." Very nice!
L
William Lynn
Sat, 2024-01-27 18:50
Hello Lavender.
Hello Lavender.
I think your favorite stanza is mine as well. Other than the cathartic benefits we might get from writing a poem, it seems a shame not to be able to give it some light and let others have the opportunity to enjoy, or not.
Thanks you, once again for taking the time to read and comment. Many thanks, Will
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2024-01-30 08:18
Congrats.
Congratulations on a well deserved win. Alex
William Lynn
Tue, 2024-01-30 11:20
Thank you Alex for your kind
Thank you Alex for your kind remarks. I was very surprised by the selection but very appreciative as well.
I hope all is well in your world across the pond.
All my best, Will
Lavender
Tue, 2024-01-30 10:15
Congratulations, Will!
Well done! What an honor!
L
William Lynn
Tue, 2024-01-30 11:23
Thank you Lavender.
Thank you Lavender.
I didn't know how my approach would be viewed and was surprised (actually shocked) when the poem was selected.
I am both appreciative and humbled by the selection but I am not surprised by the support I receive from family members like you.
Thanks you! - Will
Unca Fez
Tue, 2024-02-06 01:43
The Reader Enlightens The Author
Though I've not been a part of Neopoet for very long, I have observed its effects on Cat. It is very much a family to her.
Since joining, I find that I'm also drawn into this circle of creative souls by not only their poetry, but their comments resulting from the reading of others' works.
To that end, I've found that the comments about my submissions (other than from A.I.) have opened other perspectives on what I wrote. It is fascinating to see how others interpret what I wrote.
I don't know if it would fit on the back cover of the anthology or would be better on a fly leaf, but it would, definitely, be a good description of what Neopoet is.
Thanx,
Steve
William Lynn
Wed, 2024-02-07 15:52
Hi Steve, Thanks for taking
Hi Steve, Thanks for taking the time to read and for your comments.
Fortunately, the poem was selected to be the first poem in the next Neopoet Anthology, leading off and inviting the reader to come on in and enjoy the book they have purchased.
I was thrilled to win the contest and am glad that others will be able to enjoy it as well.
Thanks again for your comments and support. - Will