Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Once Upon A Time

Submitted by Mr joghe on Fri, 2023-02-10 05:43

Once upon a time, when men were gods
Their annoyance was like thunderstorm
There was hen-night but not for the gods
They’re the liege thread-worms in her heart
And pedantically keen on the archaic art to give her anaesthetic dose.

They’re known for punishing offenders
Without rewarding obedience
And cared not for her progress
They killed, maimed and impoverished her
Without rewarding her devotions
She offered fowls, goats, and rams
But gave her nothing
Except the power to undo her fellow.

When men were gods
She was abducted and forced into marital slavery
Many were divorced, dejected and killed
And remained calm outwardly despite being gradually eaten up inwardly
Just as an easy prey accepts its role.

Oh, if I were a woman
Must I be a slave or property?
Or not having a mind of my own?

Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
July 2023 Challenge Once upon a time
Content level: 
Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.