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My Spams

My Spams,
Email nightmare
Daily unwanted junk
Goal,access to my private files
Mailshot

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Spams" is a concise piece that effectively communicates the frustration and invasion of privacy associated with spam emails. It uses minimalistic language and structure to convey its message, which aligns with the brevity often associated with spam emails themselves.

However, the poem could benefit from a more vivid and detailed depiction of the experience. The use of metaphors, similes, or other figurative language could enhance the reader's understanding and emotional connection to the subject matter. For example, instead of "Email nightmare," the poem could explore what makes it a nightmare, such as the incessant intrusion or the potential danger of phishing attempts.

The line "Goal,access to my private files" could also be clarified. While it's understood that the goal of spam is often malicious, the phrasing here is somewhat abrupt and could be confusing to some readers. Consider rephrasing to more clearly express the idea that the spam emails are attempting to gain unauthorized access to private information.

Lastly, the term "Mailshot" is less commonly used, and its meaning may not be immediately clear to all readers. If the intention is to use jargon specific to the subject matter, this could be effective. However, if the goal is broader accessibility, a more commonly understood term might be more effective.

In conclusion, while the poem successfully conveys the annoyance of spam emails, it could benefit from more descriptive language, clearer expression of ideas, and consideration of word choice for accessibility.

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and that is the truth!

*hugs, Cat

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Thanks Cat ,
My last poems seem to revolve around scams, fishing for what we have. I wonder what is store in the next 20 years!

Thank you

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I probably will not be here then. but I can only imagine!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

and more to keep what you have left, safe from the scum out there. Nice job, Clentin. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

A modern day reality, what is next?

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