The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Mother's Aunt Nita, Norma & Bud" is a narrative piece that successfully weaves a story of love, betrayal, and magic. It uses a consistent rhyme scheme, which aids in the flow of the story and enhances the reader's engagement.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter to improve the rhythm and readability. For instance, the lines "Nita, a temptress, and good looker / caught Bud's eye, holding his gaze" disrupt the rhythm established in the previous stanzas. Consider revising this to maintain a consistent syllable count.

The poem also introduces several characters and plot elements, which can be challenging for readers to follow. It might be beneficial to simplify the narrative or provide more context to clarify the relationships and events. For example, the introduction of Don and his relationship to Norma could be more explicitly explained.

Lastly, the poem's language is generally straightforward, but it occasionally uses more complex or antiquated terms like "sveldt" and "brine". While these words can add to the poem's atmosphere, they may also confuse some readers. Consider whether these words are necessary for your intended meaning and audience.

In summary, the poem tells an engaging story but could be improved by refining the meter, clarifying the narrative, and considering the use of complex language.

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do I love your story, but boy, have you chosen a convoluted tale!
I am tempted to tell you to strip it, tear apart the structure and start over, and keep it all
and just go with trying to keep the lines rhyming within a certain limit of syllables.
It depends on how much patience you have toward the story. ~ Geez.
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Hi Cat, what a tale to be told? Full of intrigue and devilment. I loved it :)
Because your characters/relatives, are the key to this poem, maybe putting words into their mouths will identify them and will help the reader to understand the flow of this complicated realtionship?
I think you could strengthen your poem by using their statements, imagined or actual?
I'm not surprised you were tired, there's a lot going on in this tale.
Keep at it, I'm certain you will polish this to shine bright. Ruby :) xx

Somewhere in this very messy tale (the tale, not the poem), there needs to be a bit of clarification regarding the relationships between the characters. What is not clear is that Norma is your mother, which, then, would make clear that Nita was Norma's aunt, her father's sister. Somehow, working that in would spice up the tale even more.

BTW: This is a tale that I've not heard before. I always knew that Norma was a selfish b*tch. Now, it seems, the trait was inherited.

I love how you turn your life experiences into realistic poems that your reader can latch on to and feel! Great read!