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Mockingbirds and Rainbows

Being this way is like a mocking bird
Wanting to sang an original song,
But contained in a body not suited.
Imitate the ways and wears it wants to be.
Flamboyant to sing high above the trees,
Sometimes sings at night just for spite.

After all the rain falls a rainbow peaks out.
Mesmerizing and enchanting like green carnations blooms mixing and melding in an open garden.
Lavender scented pansies sprawling
sharing and caring on one another.

Rainbows can’t help that it shouts and
Dances within the clouds for attention.
Given scrapes and bats an eyelash,
Golden queens that highlight,
Makes the day sing a new song.
Mockingbirds reinterpret and
Like living in a different form.
Can trace the melody back
Just dressed a little differently.

Rainbows are unique and rare.
Conditions have to be just right.
Despite what it’s faced,
Despite all the harm rendered,
Mockingbirds keep on singing.
Allure generations and pique curiosity,
Flaunting it’s version for all to see.
Rainbows Love being free to bend the lines And blur the naked eye.

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“Mockingbirds don’t do one thing but make music for us to enjoy . . . but sing their hearts out for us. That’s why it’s a sin to kill a mockingbird.” ~Harper Lee 1960
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Mockingbirds and Rainbows". Your poem beautifully captures the essence of being unique and true to oneself, even in the face of adversity. The imagery of the mockingbird wanting to sing an original song but being contained in a body not suited is quite powerful. The comparison of the mockingbird and the rainbow is also quite interesting, as both are unique and rare in their own ways.

One suggestion I have is to consider the flow and structure of your poem. While the imagery is quite strong, the poem could benefit from a more consistent structure and rhythm. Consider playing with line breaks and punctuation to create a more cohesive flow throughout the poem.

Overall, your poem is a beautiful exploration of individuality and self-expression. Keep up the great work!

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