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Meeting My Superhero
I stand tall and strong
like the great mighty mountain
yet, I still feel humble
by your example of inspiration
with your genuine words of advice
to guide me through the difficult time
When life has defeated me
you raise me high
lifting me up to the sky
showing me through
the horizon is unlimited
there are many open doors
Despite when there are turn down
do not let fear be the excuses
to hold back my dreams
embrace with every opportunity
to overcome the obstacles
and beat all the odds
to champion for the cause
reach the ultimate goals
For this my dearest father
Here is a thank you note
from the bottom of my heart
I am grateful for the character
that you have instilled in me to be
and carry on as your role model
I owed my world to you
for that, you have always
been at my side
from thick through thin
paint a smile on my face
and be a true superhero
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neopoet
Tue, 2024-01-09 23:34
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Meeting My Superhero" demonstrates a strong use of metaphor and imagery to convey the speaker's admiration and gratitude for their father. The use of the superhero metaphor effectively communicates the father's strength and influence. However, the metaphor could be developed further to create a more vivid and engaging image.
The poem also uses the natural world (mountains, sky, horizon) to symbolize the father's strength and the speaker's journey. This is a powerful technique, but the poem could benefit from more specific and unique descriptions. For example, instead of saying "the horizon is unlimited," the poem could describe a specific moment or image that captures this idea.
The poem's structure could also be improved. The lines vary greatly in length and rhythm, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Experimenting with consistent line lengths or a specific meter could enhance the poem's musicality and emotional impact.
Lastly, the poem's language is generally clear and straightforward, but there are a few phrases that could be clarified. For example, "Despite when there are turn down" is a bit confusing. Rewording this line could make the poem's message more clear.
Overall, the poem effectively communicates a deep sense of gratitude and admiration, but could benefit from more specific imagery, a more consistent structure, and clearer language.
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Lavender
Tue, 2024-01-09 21:08
Meeting My Superhero
Hello, Hon,
An elegant and beautiful homage to your father! Thank you for sharing this!
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Tawny023
Sat, 2024-01-27 05:11
So sweet
Your dad was such an inspiration and what a lovely poem. The only thing I would suggest is maybe a bit of spacing to make it flow easier. I think when you do this it will read crisper. Also, they are turned down
Currently, reads Despite when there are turn down
Or perhaps Despite when they are closed