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Meeting the grim reaper

A man so mean
Dark and full of hate
Afraid to face himself
Alone within his sick mind
Having no more remorse or shame
A darkened smile shone on his poor face
Before he was led to his resting place

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The poem "Meeting the grim reaper" effectively utilizes an acrostic structure to build a sense of dread and foreboding. The choice of words such as "Dark", "Scarey", "Dangerous", and "mean" contribute to the overall mood of the poem, painting a vivid picture of the grim reaper.

However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery and metaphor. While the adjectives used are evocative, they are somewhat generic and could be replaced with more specific, unique descriptions to create a stronger impact. For example, instead of "A man so mean", the poet could describe specific characteristics or actions that make the grim reaper seem mean.

The line "Alone within his sick mind" is intriguing, suggesting a psychological depth to the grim reaper that could be further explored. This line could be expanded upon to give readers a deeper insight into the grim reaper's psyche.

The final two lines of the poem seem to suggest a shift in perspective, from fear and dread to pity. This is an interesting twist, but it could be made clearer with more explicit language or imagery. For example, the phrase "a darkened smile shone on his poor face" could be clarified to better convey the intended emotion.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter to enhance its musicality and flow. The current structure of the poem, with lines of varying lengths, creates a somewhat disjointed rhythm that can be distracting for readers.

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you want a darkened smile to shine? I would use " A dark smile slides across his face." Or something of the sort.
Remember that your character should stay in character, through the words you use. Nice work by the way. ~ Geez.

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Changed the last three lines to meet the required syllables

Thank you for your suggestions

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So many different faces and perceptions! I like your take on an encounter with him but glad mine was much different. Well done!


I made changes to the last three lines to meet the syllable count. Different poem.
Thank you for reading and comments

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Hello, Clentin,
Nice take on the challenge. That last line did make me think - does anyone ever lead the reaper? Does he ever rest? Thought provoking!
Thank you,

Thank you for reading and comments.
The reaper never rests!

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