The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "Leaving Tracks," effectively employs imagery and metaphor to convey a sense of nostalgia, loss, and anticipation for a new beginning. The use of concrete objects such as the window seat, the bench, and the train serve as effective symbols for the past, the present, and the future, respectively.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of poetic devices such as rhythm and rhyme. The lines vary greatly in length and syllable count, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Experimenting with a more consistent meter could enhance the overall musicality and emotional impact of the piece.

The metaphor of the "albatross" is a powerful one, but it might be more effective if it were developed further. As it stands, it feels somewhat isolated within the poem. Expanding on this metaphor could provide a more profound exploration of the speaker's emotional state.

The phrase "in my golden years" pah...Nothing golden about them now" is an interesting commentary on the speaker's disillusionment with aging. However, the use of the word "pah" may be confusing to some readers. Consider using a more universally understood expression of disdain or disappointment to ensure the message is clear to all readers.

Finally, the ending of the poem, "Leave the rest on the tracks," is a strong closing line. It effectively encapsulates the theme of leaving the past behind and moving forward. However, it might be beneficial to revisit the earlier parts of the poem and ensure that this theme is consistently developed throughout.

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This poem has me begging you not to go...it is so realistic! the feelings swell up on the page. So many emotions about to bust open! I feel another win coming for you... I love the way you tell a distinct story in the poem!

Wheels released to roll on steel rails
a "new" beginning with the old me
Memories packed and sorted
just keep the ones made long ago
Leave the rest on the tracks

I feel it! *love, Cat

Like Cat, I see the skill in your words. Your qualities as a wordsmith shine through every line. I love this stanza, using an albatross to deliver emotions is so skill full.

Two bags of clothes, a shaving kit
newly polished silver
nestled in my shirt and jacket
clinging to my neck,
like the last of the albatross

Great job, Ruby :) xx

This felt so real! The imagery was clear and emotional. Reflection, regret, sorrow rolled into one. Well done.

What I find significant is that there is almost no mention of any kind of ties to the place that is being left behind. No mention of any kind of close relationship to any people. It feels as if he/she is being forced to leave with nothing but the "two bags of clothes" and the clothes being worn and is leaving for something that is distasteful. I can imagine a situation where there is some form of financial ruin and the only option is living someplace where he/she is not really wanted. It is not a pretty picture for the latter years of someone's life.

There is so much subtext in this. Well done, sir!