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Laundry

Washing clothes by hand,
Hanging them out on the line,
Laundry done once more.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem follows the traditional structure of a haiku, with a 5-7-5 syllable count across its three lines. The subject matter is simple and everyday, which is often characteristic of this form of poetry.

The poem could benefit from the inclusion of more sensory detail or emotional resonance. For example, the first line could describe the feel of the clothes or the temperature of the water, the second line could include the sounds or smells of the outdoors, and the third line could convey a sense of satisfaction or relief.

Additionally, the poem could potentially explore a deeper theme or metaphor. The act of doing laundry could be used to symbolize purification, renewal, or the cyclical nature of life.

Lastly, the poem's title, "Laundry," is straightforward and directly reflects the content of the poem. A more creative or abstract title could add an extra layer of meaning or intrigue.

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Hello, Paul,
I think you have the beginning of a really lovely haiku. There is something very nostalgic in hand washing and line drying laundry. Any way to bring in a bit of nature? The sunshine, or wind, or perhaps the season of the poem? Perhaps give a little sensory sensation? Colors, smells?
Thank you!
L

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