The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Killing Floor" appears to explore themes of mortality, the passage of time, and the potential disappointment or disillusionment that can come with familial relationships. The use of the phrase "lambs to the slaughter" in the first line sets a somber tone and introduces the concept of inevitable death. The subsequent lines expand on this theme, suggesting a sense of resignation and perhaps a critique of the way society handles aging and death.

The poem could benefit from a more consistent rhyme scheme. The first six lines follow an ABABCC pattern, but this is not maintained throughout the rest of the poem. Consistency in rhyme scheme can help to establish rhythm and flow, enhancing the overall reading experience.

The poem also contains a few typographical errors ("hopeing" should be "hoping", "Wharehoused" should be "Warehoused") that disrupt the reading process. Correcting these errors would improve the poem's overall clarity.

The poem's message could be made clearer with more specific imagery and less abstract language. For example, the lines "Forgotten in boxes / down long empty hallways" are evocative, but it's unclear what they're referring to. Are these literal boxes and hallways, or are they metaphors for something else? Providing more context or explanation could help to clarify the poem's meaning.

The final lines of the poem hint at a complex and potentially fraught family dynamic, but this theme could be developed further. As it stands, the sudden shift to this topic feels somewhat abrupt. Incorporating this theme earlier in the poem, or expanding on it in more detail, could make the poem's narrative more cohesive and impactful.

Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact

this might have been written from two different points of view.

The lambs to a slaughter part, doesn't seem to be coherent with the rest of the lines describing
the warehousing of people who eventually die. I would think that the words "lambs to the slaughter",
had some more direct bearing on their deaths. ~ Geez.
.

that I recognize the feeling, [chuckle]. I applaud your generous nature and not going into Jason-mode and on the lam, in some dismal backcountry with a chainsaw! If truth be known, [not from my lips], I have some moments where if I didn't have Killer,
I don't know what I may have done! I say we all have that Darkside, we just suppress it in the interest of "Hey, what if someone were to decide to do that to me"? The reason that slap-stick comedy was so popular until 30 years ago, you know, Bugs Bunny, Daffy Duck, Three Stooges... You knew that it was just fake for the most part, [although some people actually did get hurt now and then]. Now with the... ahhhhh don't get me started. Now that I have the low-down, I will read it in a new light. ~ Geez.
.