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Hot Summer Nights

Stars shine above…
Their reflections in the waves.

The rush of a warm breeze
flows across my skin.

Sandy feet and salt water hair
bask in the moonlight

What I wouldn’t give
for these tropical summer nights
to last a lifetime.

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The poem "Hot Summer Nights" effectively uses sensory details to create a vivid and immersive setting. The use of phrases such as "Stars shine above", "rush of a warm breeze", and "Sandy feet and salt water hair" work well to engage the reader's senses and transport them to the scene.

However, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure. The majority of the lines in the poem are simple sentences, which can make the poem feel somewhat monotonous. Experimenting with more complex sentence structures could add rhythm and interest to the poem.

Additionally, the poem could benefit from more exploration of the speaker's emotions. The line "What I wouldn’t give for these tropical summer nights to last a lifetime" suggests a longing or desire, but this emotion is not fully developed in the poem. Expanding on this emotion could add depth to the poem and make the speaker's experience more relatable to the reader.

Lastly, the poem could use more metaphorical language. While the sensory details are effective in creating a vivid setting, the use of metaphors could add another layer of meaning to the poem and make it more thought-provoking for the reader.

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Makes me feel like I am back on the ocean again. One of my favorite spots.

It's one of my favorite places to be too!

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plain language that describes a scene that anyone who has ever swum in the ocean will remember.
Love it! ~ Geezer.

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Thanks, Geezer! I appreciate the feedback!

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Beautiful visual...I could smell the salt water's been so long since I've vacationed on a beach...good job


I could smell it too! Thank you for the feedback, RoseBlack!

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