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Please Stay...

Submitted by Kristen H. on Fri, 2024-03-01 21:15

I keep replaying
Your words in my head

"Don't go,
I'm begging you,
Please stay..."

The broken record torments me
Day and night

I didn't know
It would end like this

I didn't know
How bad it would hurt

I would've stayed up
All night with you
If only I'd known...

Now here I am,
Sitting at your grave
With your voice
Whispering to me
"Please stay..."

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Sat, 2024-03-02 03:20

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-03-01 21:49

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Hello, Kristen,
I feel the overwhelming regret and heartbreak here. So much emotion in such a brief poem. Condolences if this is a personal experience for you.
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Kristen H.

Sat, 2024-03-02 08:07

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very much, Lavender. I appreciate your feedback and condolences.

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Kristen H.

Sat, 2024-03-02 08:07

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very much, Mark. Your feedback is always appreciated!!

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Geezer

Sat, 2024-03-02 18:47

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to add, except my condolences. There is always that last but... We don't know what the future holds, and it's a damned good thing that we don't, and we can't fix the past. Otherwise, we would be rushing to "better days" and fixing the past; forgetting to live in the now. Very well done, ~ Geez.
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