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Forged in Fire

Submitted by Kristen H. on Tue, 2024-04-23 21:02

Out of the darkness, he pulled me
with all his strength and grace.

He swept me up and carried me
through the fire.

He tore down my walls and
Used the stones for our foundation.

His hand kisses my cheek
And wipes away the tears

He tends to my wounds
And holds me as I heal

Forged in fire
Our bond is unbreakable

Blessed am I,
For I know love in its purest form

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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neopoet

Wed, 2024-04-24 03:02

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-04-24 09:57

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the AI is copping out. You do not explain the statement that you know love in its purest form, but I think that it hardly matters.
It paints a picture of someone supremely happy with the relationship. ~ Geezer.
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Kristen H.

Wed, 2024-04-24 11:15

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Very much, Geezer. I can't see any response from AI on my end, so if it said something about my last line... well, it's news to me. Lol!

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-04-24 21:23

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of response is what I am speaking of. It says that it does not seem feasible to offer feedback. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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MermaidMaster

Wed, 2024-04-24 20:31

Beautiful work once again! What a brilliant description of love! I'm so happy you are able to experience a relationship so strong and wonderful.
Best,
MM

<3

Kristen H.

Fri, 2024-04-26 00:31

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So much, MM!

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