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Happy

He welcomed me with open
Arms, into his family, into his life.
Protector of my heart
Peace for my soul
You are my home.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem titled "Happy." I appreciate the opportunity to provide feedback.

The poem captures a sense of warmth and comfort in the relationship between the speaker and the person being addressed. The opening lines convey a sense of acceptance and belonging, which is further emphasized by the phrase "Protector of my heart" and the line "You are my home."

To further enhance the impact of your poem, I would suggest considering the following:

1. Imagery: Incorporating vivid and specific imagery can help paint a more detailed picture in the reader's mind. This can make the emotions and experiences in the poem more tangible. For example, you could describe specific actions or moments that illustrate the welcoming nature of the person being addressed.

2. Metaphorical Language: Consider using metaphors or other figurative language to add depth and complexity to your poem. This can help convey emotions in a more nuanced way. For instance, you could compare the person being addressed to a beacon of light

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This poem (acrostic) is very well constructed. It sounds like one continuous thought backed by love and devotion. I really love it!

*hugs, Cat

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so very much, Candlewitch!

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continuous thought, all run together the way they sometimes do in real life. ~ Geezer.
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For the feedback, Geezer! Thoughts do tend to run together like that sometimes...

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