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Haiku #6

A low sun watches
a poorly swept-up frost; hang its'
cobwebs out to dry.

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

What can a guy say but bravo. What a linguistic photograph you’ve got here.

Gorgeous
Tim

Thank you indeed.

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that picture of dew dropped web blowing faintly in the warm sunshine! Like Mrs. Spider just washed the sheets from her bed.
Nice stuff. ~ Geezer.
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Personifying the sun is a very beautiful poetic device used in the poem. Nice one!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Yes......I strive to personify without sentiment to help the reader to access the images. Difficult though to stay minimalist.

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