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H#10

Pools of liquid sky
left behind by idle seas,
gather in the kelp.

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the sky mirrored in the slack water between the kelp decorated swells! Very good Haiku. Peaceful and smooth. ~ Geezer.
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please elaborate defensive posture. Also your interpretation avoids the the tension of personification.

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My signature appears the same for all my comments and critique.
It should not be percieved as a comment on your work.
I mean it for those who when criticised about style, form or other things
make the statement of "I write for myself, I'm not really interested
in what other people think". I feel if you just write for yourself
don't bother posting it on a website that advertises itself as a workshop
for the betterment of one's work; keep it in a notebook and whenever you feel like
a poet, read from it.

Second, if your definition of what it means, is to reflect a personified tension, who am I
to say otherwise? I think your question is born of the percieved notion that my signature is
meant for you alone. Nothing could be further from the truth. I enjoyed your Haiku.
~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Yes....thank you for clarification. I understand your veiw.

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Your version flies but devoid of personified tension I believe.

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Hello, Loki,
Your haiku poems have all been beautiful, but I especially like the gentle quiet in this piece. I don't believe the comma is necessary, unless you have a specific intent?
Lovely!
L

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