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H#9

Submitted by Loki on Sat, 2022-12-31 05:10

A sea, brimmed with storm,
invites the streeting clouds to
spill light in its waves.

Style / type:

Structured: Eastern

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

How was my language use?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Editing stage:

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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Sat, 2022-12-31 11:52

New Years eve
a black dog
at the door.

Sat, 2022-12-31 15:34

on your post, Obi, but is this haiku about a bit of traditional folklore?
I am intrigued! :)
L

Sat, 2022-12-31 23:34

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Sat, 2022-12-31 15:27

Hello, Loki,
You capture the scene in motion. I especially like the word "invites."
Thank you!
L

Sat, 2022-12-31 22:47

I can see the afterglow of a storm against the sea so clearly. Wonderful job.

~RoseBlack~

Sat, 2022-12-31 23:32

You did that.....I just offered you a spring board.

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