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Haiku#4

Submitted by Loki on Tue, 2022-12-27 08:18

Water boatmen;
sowing rings of light
on blue mirrors.

Style / type:

Structured: Eastern

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

How was my language use?

Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 25 to 31st 2022

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-12-27 08:36

dear Loki,

incredible language skills! your haiku is fresh and mellow...such beauty in so few words. I stand impressed! welcome to Neopoet, I hope you and your work find a home here. if I can be of any help to you, all you have to do is ask. please enjoy the site.

*regards, Cat

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Rosewood Apothecary

Tue, 2022-12-27 10:50

Allow me to welcome you as well

I also enjoyed this thoroughly. I’m going to attempt to paint this I think. It’s imagery is astounding an inspiring.

Welcome
Tim

Rula

Tue, 2022-12-27 11:12

Welcome to Neopoet

Hello loki
A wonderful first submission.
I too am a fan of the minimalists. Isn't wonderful how much one can say in such few words.
Thank you for sharing.
Please feel free to read and comment on others works.
Wish you'd enjoy your time here.

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