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Grief

Submitted by Clentin on Sun, 2023-02-26 08:08

Sadness I do feel
Greater than an open wound
When a loved one leaves

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Sun, 2023-02-26 08:22

hello and good morning to you,

you always have something worthwhile to say. I admire that!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Clentin

Sun, 2023-02-26 08:32

Thank you.

Thank you.
My last poem Apple Pie was an attempt at a 10 line poem starting with one syllable.
I like haikus

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Seren

Sun, 2023-02-26 09:44

I felt this poem as well as absorbed it. I lost my Dad nearly 10mths ago and the grief is ever present for me, still. It has been the hardest time I've had since my Mum passed. Your poetry is like an opening flower. Blooming.

Kind regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Clentin

Sun, 2023-02-26 17:22

Thank you. You are right,

Thank you. You are right, nothing is worse than losing a family member

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Lavender

Sun, 2023-02-26 10:28

Grief

Hello, Clentin,
So acutely descriptive - "greater than an open wound." I feel the sincerity of your title.
Thank you,
L

RoseBlack

Sun, 2023-02-26 11:32

Grief

The many stages of grief...but "greater than an open wound" surely sums it up for me. A beautiful, short write that says so much.

~RoseBlack~

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Grief