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Flowers

Submitted by Clentin on Mon, 2023-01-09 14:28

Transient little puffs of life
Reach deeply from one soul
To another

Transferring to man small packets
Of beauty created by God

So we are able to experience a
Few moments of happiness today

And remind us of what may not
Be tomorrow

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-01-09 16:55

Yeah

That’s a good observation. If you think about it we sort of appreciate them from a purely aesthetic and artistic perspective. This is really a cool way of studying the reason why we give each other flowers.

Nice job,
Tim

Lavender

Mon, 2023-01-09 18:04

Flowers

Hello, Clentin,
A sincere appreciation for flowers, and life in its simple form. The first stanza seems so significant for me, I almost want to replace "reach" with "rooted" sensing such a deep connection from one soul to another.
Thank you!
L

Clentin

Mon, 2023-01-09 19:09