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A Family Feud

Like children
fighting in hell
battle of bad mouth
action call for name-picking

Anger boil temper
fist of hand in a display
a frown on the face
rumor spread all over

Bring to a disaster
with quarrel comes
to a fighting war
create conflicts and chaotic

A revisit with thought
of reflecting understanding
bring love and respect
that ties the bond together

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "A Family Feud" presents a vivid depiction of conflict within a family, utilizing strong imagery and emotional language to convey the intensity of the situation. However, there are areas where the poem could benefit from further refinement.

1. Syntax and Grammar: The poem seems to be written in a non-standard syntax. While this can sometimes add to the charm and uniqueness of a poem, in this case, it occasionally leads to confusion. For example, "anger boil temper" and "fist of hand in a display" could be clarified. Using more conventional grammar might make the poem more accessible to a wider audience.

2. Consistency in Imagery: The poem uses a variety of images to depict the family feud, such as "children fighting in hell," "battle of bad mouth," and "fist of hand in a display." While these images are powerful, they don't seem to connect to a unified theme or metaphor. Establishing a consistent metaphor or theme could enhance the coherence and impact of the poem.

3. Development of Ideas: The poem could benefit from a more detailed exploration of the causes and consequences of the family feud. This could add depth to the poem and make the resolution in the final stanza more meaningful.

4. Punctuation: The poem lacks punctuation, which can make it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of ideas. Adding appropriate punctuation could improve readability.

5. Final Stanza: The final stanza introduces the idea of reconciliation, but it feels somewhat abrupt. Expanding on this idea could provide a more satisfying resolution to the poem.

In summary, while the poem effectively conveys the emotional intensity of a family feud, it could benefit from improvements in syntax, consistency in imagery, development of ideas, punctuation, and resolution.

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