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EXEMPT (December poem to friends now gone)

They are all still here inside
the circuits made of silicon
where electrons dodge and glide.
Too many poets counted as gone.

Joe, the modest expert on verse
who taught with positive feedback
(or gentle critique at the worst).
His photons sprint among the black.

And elf who fought me tooth and nail
but over time became my friend
as he urged me toward perfection's grail.
He's here although he met his end.

Then Ian with his tame calm ways
who knew more than he would let on.
In near silence met his end of days.
He lives on even though he's gone.

Of course there is the "meter maid"
who tried her best to teach me scansion
correcting each mistake I made.
She lives on in her electronic mansion.

To all still within this electronic place
whose times came then came to pass
I hope this poem can find your trace.
I wish you all a merry Christmas
there where from death you are exempt..

*and merry Christmas to all still on this side of the veil.

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I recognise some of the people you reference in this poem who too helped me along with my journey. Unfortunately I can't give much critique because I think it is a beautiful ode to some beautiful people. Personal and beautiful. Keep up the good work,

Nicholas.

I am pleased you think well of this scribble

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Look up feedback if ya like pretty sure it is one word.
What a fitting tribute to all.
Mark
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should be a single word

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hi stan I always thought you were only a scribbler not a scientist electronic magician o what a SURPRISE STAN
SIR

why have you forgotten friend jess and the sonnetry one did you mean the aussie one.
stan we have been on this road of NEO since very long

I was wondering now for how long
a simple request you will not grant i know then not an obituary but an eulogy not too bright nor dull
about me sow
I will add it as a PREFACE to my 51 good poems
you read some Advance thanks

The site had that major crash in 2010 and I'd been here almost a year when that happened. So I've been here about 12 and a half years and I think you have been the same......we are officially 2 old farts lol. I didn't forget Jess. He is referenced as the "elf". Do I understand you want me to write a eulogy about you? That will take some time to do well. I might have to PM you some for information too.

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scribbler. Although I did not know the people you wrote about, I admire that you took time to wish them a merry Christmas. Merry Christmas to you as well.

Thomas

.Thomas

...so like my lost dreams...the flood

I thought it a change from wishing those still with us a Merry Christmas. Thanks for the visit

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