The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "DEER 'HUNT'" effectively uses vivid imagery and sensory details to immerse the reader in the scene. The detailed descriptions of nature, the animals, and the hunter's actions create a strong sense of place and atmosphere. The narrative structure of the poem, which follows the hunter's thoughts and actions throughout the day, also contributes to its immersive quality.

However, the poem's rhythm and meter could be improved. The lines vary in length and syllable count, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Consistent rhythm and meter can enhance the musicality of the poem and make it more engaging to read.

The poem's theme of solitude and reflection is conveyed through the hunter's observations and thoughts. However, this theme could be developed further. The hunter's reflections on aging and the passage of time are introduced relatively late in the poem, and they could be integrated more smoothly into the narrative.

The poem's ending is effective in conveying the hunter's satisfaction with the day and his hope for more hunting experiences in the future. However, the transition from the narrative of the hunt to the hunter's reflections and the conclusion could be smoother. The shift in focus from the external to the internal world of the hunter is somewhat abrupt.

The use of language in the poem is generally clear and effective. However, there are a few instances where the wording could be more precise. For example, the phrase "my list of such has has become small" is somewhat unclear. Rewording this line could improve its clarity and impact.

Overall, the poem is effective in creating a vivid and immersive hunting scene and in conveying the hunter's reflections on solitude, aging, and the passage of time. However, improvements could be made in the areas of rhythm and meter, thematic development, transitions, and precision of language.

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Hello, Stan,
Always so lovely to be one with nature with your poetry. The description of your surroundings, and your memories are vivid and enduring. The mood is serene and your thoughts are so engaging. (So glad you let this baby go...)
Thank you!
L

One I went afield with friends and kin
to hear hounds run or no sounds at all.
Now that my hair is white and thin
my list of such has has become small

in the first line, I think you meant to write (Once) instead of (One)

I really enjoyed the whole poem, but these lines stood out:

For my freezer is already full
and I want a deer that's old.
So there was no urge to pull
yet this hunt still turned out well all told.

So I sit here a little more
just enjoying being here
one more memory to store
with all the times I've hunted deer.
I arise hoping there will be more

*love and good wishes, Cat

p.s.
AI is never satisfied, ignore it!

been a while since you took me on a walk or hunt. You know that I enjoy every line, though the AI is right of course.
Your rhyme pattern is par excellence, and you have rough edges on the blade, but it's still sharp enough to cut deep for all of us that won't be making any more trips to the woods. I thank you for the trip, ~ Geez.
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Checking out your revisions, and noticed you exchanged "oak" trees for "distant" trees. Aw...I love the reference to the oak. It's the big brother to all the other trees in the woods, the ancient, spiritual presence, and a lovely touch of character and personality in your poem. It gave a sense of respect and acknowledgment for the great outdoors. Just my thoughts...
Thank you!
L

you and yours could manage to wrest this deal from the bank. See? We may not always get we want, but sometimes we get what we can afford. Nicely done, no matter my constant reminders of scansion. LoL
~ Geez.
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