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Submitted by Geezer on Thu, 2022-06-30 09:37

In looking through the keyhole
there stared an eyeball back at me
I was really fascinated
and then there was a knee!

They listened at the door
I heard them breathing then
I was frightened, but excited
so I looked just once again

Little breathing whispers
who is that, that is there?
I heard another voice
"Come back, cause I don't care"

"Peeping Tom is at our keyhole
Let's make love again
give them quite the show
what we're doing ain't a sin"

So every night I watched
learning something new
while looking through the keyhole
I got a different point of view

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - polished draft
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week June 26 to July 2nd 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Obadiah Grey

Thu, 2022-06-30 09:57

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Oh, yeah, I'm in every part of this!
Its the sneaky bits o' life that get you through.

"When you change the way you look at things
the things you look at change"
A different slant on oddity
the peculiar- weird and strange.

Cheers, Geez.

Obi.

Geezer

Thu, 2022-06-30 11:23

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A tale from a neighbor's little boy! LoL
He told his mommy, that he was looking at the keyhole of his sister's room, because the door was locked and he heard her in there. His mommy was laughing so hard that she could hardly tell the story! "He said mommy, they were wrestling and it sounded like they were having fun, but they wouldn't let me in so I could play too!" LMAO! ~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey

Thu, 2022-06-30 11:30

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Heehaw Heehaw...!!

Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-06-30 10:27

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I see you are getting a bit lazy in your tile: only abbreviate words when texting or stealing a recipe, lol! i love this poem...and you; especially when you get deviously playful! these lines are my favorite:

So every night I watched
learning something new
while looking through the keyhole
I got a different point of view

*hugs & grins, Cat & eddy

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-06-30 11:37

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this little boy is a constant source of amusement at the antics he pulls. His mother thought it was funny as all get out!
Now her daughter has put something over the keyhole and his little voyuer days are over. His father laughed so hard he fell off his chair and told me and the neighbor about it, laughing hard all the way. It seems that these neighbors have children that are regular Dennis the Menace types. His brother is the one I wrote the "Devil's Ride" about. Of course, I embellished that one quite a bit, but the basic story of his antics are true. Seems like little Rodney is taking after his brother! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2022-06-30 14:38

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It’s absolutely preposterous and I love it.

Geezer

Thu, 2022-06-30 19:50

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Yeah, funny as Hell! Dad is a funny guy too! Got a great sense of humor! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-06-30 18:32

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And the story behind it was even funnier! Good write!

~RoseBlack~

Geezer

Thu, 2022-06-30 19:53

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They're a funny bunch! Thanks for the read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Warrior Princess

Thu, 2022-06-30 20:14

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Geezer, this poem is well written. What resonated with me is how the author showed the analogy of the different perspectives or points of view associating the image or angle, looking through a keyhole. Very creative and beautifully penned.

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

Geezer

Fri, 2022-07-01 08:03

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for your read and comments. I had fun writing this one. Just a lirttle taste of my brand of humor. I am not all Killer and serious stuff. I like to have a little comedic fun now and then. ~Geezer.
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Ray Whitaker

Fri, 2022-07-01 14:11

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There are laws against that aren't there? Laughing

love the humor in this!

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-07-01 23:18

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with my six-year-old eye! [I was a little precocious!] Thanks Ray. ~ Geezer.
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