The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem demonstrates a strong understanding of rhythm and rhyme, which contributes to its overall flow. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter. While some lines adhere to a set number of syllables, others do not, which can disrupt the rhythm of the poem. For example, the line "Like leaves they turn slowly dun" has more syllables than the lines surrounding it. A more consistent meter would enhance the musicality of the poem.

Secondly, the poem's theme of time and memory could be explored more deeply. While the poem does touch on these themes, it could delve further into the emotions and experiences associated with them. This could be done through the use of more vivid imagery or metaphors.

Lastly, the poem's language could be more varied. The poem relies heavily on simple, everyday language, which can limit its ability to evoke strong emotions in the reader. By incorporating more sophisticated or unusual words, the poem could become more engaging and thought-provoking.

Overall, while this poem has a clear theme and structure, it could be improved by refining its meter, deepening its exploration of its themes, and varying its language.

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Hello, Stan,
Love the title, and everything that follows. I feel the wisdom and the knowledge of a life well-lived. This is one of your lovely, reflective walks - but this is not through the woods and meadows. It's through time itself.
Thank you!
L

I just wanted to say; good luck on the contest. this is a theme I often think about. well done!

*hugs, Cat