The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "A Day at the Lake" effectively uses sensory language to immerse the reader in the scene. The tactile imagery of "grains of sand between my toes" and the visual imagery of "cotton Figures free, sailing across the blue expanse" are particularly evocative.

However, the poem could benefit from more consistent use of punctuation and capitalization. For example, "Figures free, sailing across the blue expanse" starts with a capital 'F' in the middle of a sentence, which may confuse readers.

The line "I rise, sputtering and tug at the seat of my suit" could also be clarified. As it stands, it's unclear whether "sputtering" is meant to modify "I rise" or "tug at the seat of my suit". A possible revision could be: "I rise, sputtering, and tug at the seat of my suit".

The phrase "survey the source of the lake" is somewhat ambiguous. If the intention is to convey that the speaker is looking for the origin of the lake, this may not be a typical action for someone swimming in a lake and could be clarified for better understanding.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter. As it stands, the lines vary greatly in length and syllable count, which can disrupt the flow of the poem.

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Nice scene of the beach, vivid discription in short lines.
I saw water clear enough to see my toes and the sand between them,
I felt the iciness of a spring fed lake, and welcomed the coolness.
The little aside, about pulling your suit, is something so typical of women,
but a reflex action on their part, and little noticed.
I would use a different word to discribe the reclining back,
maybe just a [I lie back].

The lines in the last could be better aligned,
I believe that you wanted to say,

" I [recline] back to glide,
and gaze at the cotton figures,
free, sailing across
the blue expanse" .

Do you see what I mean?
I see what the AI means with placing the commas in the line, "I rise, sputtering, and tug at the seat of my suit."
As always, my advice is yours to use in any way you think might help. ~ Geezer.
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