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The poem effectively uses the metaphor of a china figure and bulls to illustrate the concept of resilience in the face of adversity. The imagery is vivid and the narrative is clear. However, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of the emotions and experiences of the china figure.

The phrase "The bulls point and laugh" is somewhat incongruous. Bulls, being animals, do not have the capability to perform these human actions. This anthropomorphism might distract some readers from the intended message. A more fitting description of the bulls' actions might enhance the overall impact of the poem.

The poem's ending is quite bleak, with the china figure reduced to dust. If this is the intended message, it is conveyed effectively. However, if the intention was to highlight resilience and recovery, the ending could be revised to reflect a sense of hope or determination, even in the face of complete destruction.

The use of the pronoun "she" to refer to the china figure introduces a personal element to the poem. If this was intentional, it might be worth exploring this aspect further to give the poem additional depth and emotional resonance.

The structure of the poem is consistent, with short lines and stanzas. This works well to convey the sense of the china figure being repeatedly broken and reassembled. However, the rhythm of the poem could be improved with more careful attention to syllable count and stress patterns.

In terms of language, the poem is straightforward and accessible. However, the use of more varied vocabulary and poetic devices such as similes, metaphors, or alliteration could enhance the poem's aesthetic appeal.

Overall, the poem effectively communicates a narrative of resilience and destruction. With some revisions to enhance the emotional depth, clarify the metaphor, and improve the rhythm and language, it could be even more impactful.

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Hello, PF,
Very relevant metaphor to use for the contest. It is raw and discomforting, as it should be. I wonder if the first stanza might be changed to also use feminine pronouns like the rest of the poem, instead of "it." Seems the poem may flow a bit smoother and the figurine would be personified right away, connecting the reader to more emotion and feeling. Just a thought. A sad and powerful final line.
Thank you!
L

this poem puts me in mind of many battered women I have known. these lines resonated with me:

After the repeated
onslaughts, she is left
crushed, no longer
knowing her form,
Unable to stand or
reassemble herself,
she is left as dust.

good work and best of luck on the contest!

*hugs, Cat

An evocative piece with the powerful of resilience and eventual destruction.
A pity to live In such a world, but it is unfortunately the real world.
Well penned.
Best wishes.

Through reading this well crafted poem I was thinking of names like Bully the bull and Chyna the china figurine, which is a testimony to how invested I was in reading about animal and a thing. I totally was captured by the action, emotion, torment and story you provided. Thank you for sharing.