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Dark Angel 5

Enfold me dark Angel, Enfold me,
With your Black Satin Wings draw me near,
Draw me close to your soft swollen bosom,
Draw me far from life and its fears.

Embrace me dark Angel, Embrace me,
Keep me safe in the coldness of love,
Let my mind sink to the abyss
To be held as if in silk glove.

Teach me dark Angel, teach me,
You know that to you I am true.
Though you give yourself freely to others
None will be faithful to you.

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Your poem gave me the shivers. If that was your intention, well done, scary.
I enjoyed your use of metaphor and illiteration, both delivered in brevity.
A familiar subject matter given a modern day twist, well done. Ruby :)

I always reply to comments on my work, thank you.

Hello Ruby. That was not the original intention, I just wanted something dark. Still I am very pleased with the effect. Alex

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I don't know what but this whole poem is just amazing.

Thank you Jes. I have just read a couple of your works. I enjoyed them. It will be interesting to see how you develop. Alex

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Just beautiful!


Thank you Rose, appreciated. Alex

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Congratulations Alex on winning the poem of the week, I'm made up for you. Ruby :)

I always reply to comments on my work, thank you.

Thank you Ruby. Alex

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you set the hook with your first line and its repetition. exquisitely haunting... the undercurrent of sorrow is delicious. there is a note of yearning that intensifies to the end of this piece. poignant, walking the razors edge of pain and pleasure that is devotion. thank you for this write. and congratulations to you.

* best wishes, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you Cat, you have always been so kind, it is appreciated. Alex

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Certainly dark, and magnetic!

I was here now I disappear..

Thank you Max. all comments appreciated. Alex

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absolutely awesome. I loved it

Tiffany K. Smith

Thank you Tiffany, so glad you liked it. I like to write (or try ) about the power women can exert over the weaker of the species. There are several Dark Angel poems and more to come. Alex.

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My first read of the poem brought forth the memory of "Phantom of the Opera", but subsequent readings showed me there was more to it than that. Your "dark Angel" is a powerful figure, yet, somehow, seems to be made the victim by almost all. I'm still digesting this one. I really like a poem that takes me a while to work through all the nuances.


Thank you Steve, It's always good when someone appreciates one's efforts. Alex

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