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Dark Angel 5

Enfold me dark Angel, Enfold me,
With your Black Satin Wings draw me near,
Draw me close to your soft swollen bosom,
Draw me far from life and its fears.

Embrace me dark Angel, Embrace me,
Keep me safe in the coldness of love,
Let my mind sink to the abyss
To be held as if in silk glove.

Teach me dark Angel, teach me,
You know that to you I am true.
Though you give yourself freely to others
None will be faithful to you.

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Your poem gave me the shivers. If that was your intention, well done, scary.
I enjoyed your use of metaphor and illiteration, both delivered in brevity.
A familiar subject matter given a modern day twist, well done. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Hello Ruby. That was not the original intention, I just wanted something dark. Still I am very pleased with the effect. Alex

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THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!
I don't know what but this whole poem is just amazing.

Thank you Jes. I have just read a couple of your works. I enjoyed them. It will be interesting to see how you develop. Alex

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Just beautiful!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you Rose, appreciated. Alex

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Congratulations Alex on winning the poem of the week, I'm made up for you. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Thank you Ruby. Alex

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you set the hook with your first line and its repetition. exquisitely haunting... the undercurrent of sorrow is delicious. there is a note of yearning that intensifies to the end of this piece. poignant, walking the razors edge of pain and pleasure that is devotion. thank you for this write. and congratulations to you.

* best wishes, Cat

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Thank you Cat, you have always been so kind, it is appreciated. Alex

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Thank you Max. all comments appreciated. Alex

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absolutely awesome. I loved it

Tiffany K. Smith

Thank you Tiffany, so glad you liked it. I like to write (or try ) about the power women can exert over the weaker of the species. There are several Dark Angel poems and more to come. Alex.

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My first read of the poem brought forth the memory of "Phantom of the Opera", but subsequent readings showed me there was more to it than that. Your "dark Angel" is a powerful figure, yet, somehow, seems to be made the victim by almost all. I'm still digesting this one. I really like a poem that takes me a while to work through all the nuances.

Thanx,
Steve

Thank you Steve, It's always good when someone appreciates one's efforts. Alex

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Loved the gothic feel to your well crafted poem.
And as has been already said, the poem sends shivers down one's spine when reading it.

Hello Kaz, thank you always good to hear reactions. That was number 5 of several that i have written that I call Dark Angel. I'll put them up from time to time. Alex

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This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Thanks for your comments Aesthetic. Alex

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"Keep me safe in the coldness of love"
This phrase gave me a pause, and I sat to consider it for a while. What a fascinating contrast to illustrate an embrace, and then call love cold!

Thank you Alaethia for your comments on my efforts. I will not respond to all except to repeat. Thank you so much. Alex

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Wowza Alex! How could escape from the fears that life presents not be found?
A bittersweet ending perfectly executed.
To be moved twixt the dark and the light.
Great writing,
Mark

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Thank you Mark, always gratifying to receive compliments. Alex.

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