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Boardwalk

His wooden legs soaked it's feet into the sloshing
salty water it's body lifting up a board to walk
on. Sheets of purple lights drowned the sea
with their glow and a theatre of sea air mixed
with thalassic crabs and briny seafaring lobsters
filled are nostrils.

Strolling past we were met by a
turbulence of screaming pink lungs pirouetting
on a blur of neon lights on fair rides.
It was flecked with tourists and romantic
couples enjoying a few days off and a night out.
I decided to take her further so we walked under.

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