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Zack
Im shaving my head to a skinhead my
Eyes are hemorrhaging red with hatred
I wish everyone was dead, vomiting blood
and spilling out a pile of guts and crimson lines
of dripping throats
My fist crunches against the mirror shards fly like
spears, like my life I can't fix back together
I snap out of my deep thoughts and take my
head out of my desk, as the school
bell vibrates my heavy restless chest . I walk pass
shapes of crowded
voices and squint my eyes into deadly sharp daggers
They cut into a skinny boy minding his own
business, I charge knocking him onto his ass
but he is saved from his stupid rucksack, his
thick glasses jump off his face by the impact
My shadow creeps over my victim like a
thick fog over a city. He scrambles to get
to his feet and create distance, my dms are
slapping behind him.
I catch up with a psycho grin and pull out
my compass ready to drive it in, his eyes swung back
haunted wide screaming for his life why why.
Next thing I know my hands are around his throat
Squeezing until he stops fighting and eventually
stops kicking.
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Wed, 2024-09-18 17:40
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Leslie
Thu, 2024-09-19 09:13
Zack
Great vocab I like it, but a bit too violent. Someone innocent gets hurt,but keep writing I like your style!
Today never knows what tommorow will bring!
Jokerface82
Thu, 2024-09-19 17:45
Yeah
Bully's are dark lol thank you, I appreciate the comment
Rula
Thu, 2024-09-26 17:14
Hello Jokerface
I like how you take this from the bully's pov. rather than from the ones been bullied.
I thought the language, though a bit violent and dark, very much suitable.
Thank you for sharing.
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Jokerface82
Fri, 2024-09-27 03:41
Thank you
I appreciate that thank you, and hello to you