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Believe

Assiduous Beliefs

How much of life do we think we control
Destiny is preordained beyond interpretation
Choices are the test. For solidarity the peace of mind and soul

Belief in ones purpose is the hardest road

Pronouncement is simply the faith that we are here to learn
Pronouncement is simply the Proclamation of why we are born

Belief is the only part of life we control

Only ones ignorance will be seduce by pride
Sincerity can be imprudent, by ones belief in their selfish rights
So be assiduous in questions that you decide
There are decisions, that only destiny will provide

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Believe" presents an exploration of the concept of belief, destiny, and the human ability to control life. The poem's philosophical and introspective nature is evident, which can be an effective way to engage readers in deep thought.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of poetic devices to enhance its impact. For instance, the use of metaphors, similes, or personification could help to create more vivid imagery and make the abstract concepts more tangible to the reader.

The poem also seems to shift between different ideas without clear transitions. For example, the lines "Belief in ones purpose is the hardest road" and "Only ones ignorance will be seduce by pride" seem to introduce new ideas without fully connecting to the previous lines. This can make the poem feel somewhat disjointed and may confuse readers. To improve this, consider revising the poem to ensure a smoother flow of ideas and a more coherent message.

Additionally, the poem's rhythm and meter could be improved. The inconsistent line lengths and syllable counts can disrupt the poem's flow and make it less engaging to read. Consider revising the poem to have a more consistent rhythm, which can help to enhance its musicality and readability.

Lastly, there are a few grammatical errors in the poem, such as "ones ignorance" and "ones belief", which should be "one's ignorance" and "one's belief". These errors can distract readers and detract from the poem's overall impact. Therefore, it would be beneficial to proofread the poem to correct these errors.

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