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Absolution

Submitted by Clentin on Sat, 2023-02-18 03:52

Forgiveness is near
If we open our hearts now
Without questioning

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week February 12th to February 18th 2023

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-02-18 10:18

Yes

A simple yet, meaningful write. Forgiveness is difficult but there if we are open to it. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Clentin

Sat, 2023-02-18 10:24

Thank you for.your comments.

Thank you for.your comments. I was trying to write a Haiku using the 5 7 5 syllables
New at this trying different forms.

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RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-02-18 10:39

done well. I am new at writing different forms as well! This is what makes this site so great is that it is a learning workshop. We all learn from each other and give each other encouragement to try different things.

~RoseBlack~

Lavender

Sat, 2023-02-18 11:41

Absolution

Hello, Clentin,
What a beautiful message! The definition of unconditional love. I've been trying to explore the haiku realm, too, and it is more challenging than it looks! I believe this would actually be considered a senryu, which is a bit different than haiku in that it deals with human elements and emotions, whereas haiku's subject is about nature - seasons, earthly elements. You have written an inspiring piece - much to love in a brief form.
Thank you!
L

Clentin

Sat, 2023-02-18 11:49

Thank you. I am trying to

Thank you. I am trying to explore the different types of poems.
I am not familiar with sendup?

I thought a haiku was any topic that used the 5,7,5 syllable
Form?

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Clentin

Sat, 2023-02-18 11:50

Senru! Sorry

Senru!
Sorry

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Lavender

Sat, 2023-02-18 12:00

Hi, Clentin,

There are so many wonderful, challenging, and fun poetry forms out there! You may want to look up the differences between haiku, senryu, and another called tanka - all Japanese poetry forms. I normally write free verse, so when I try a structured form, I try very hard to follow guidelines and rules to meet the challenge. There is history and culture in most forms that give us insight into the minds of poets. I could study it all day...
Again, your poem is wonderful in structure, feeling, and message! A gift to read!
L

RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-02-18 13:27

L

Thank you for explaining the difference in the types of Japanese poetry. I never realized that haiku focused on nature and senryu was for human emotions. More reasons I love this site! We learn from each other.

~RoseBlack~

Lavender

Sat, 2023-02-18 13:39

Hi, Carrie,

I can relay only what I've learned so far, which is just a drop in the sea of poetry. There are layers after layers to haiku / senryu. Clentin's poem is intriguing and very thought provoking not only in its strong message, but haiku / senryu form!
L

Clentin

Sat, 2023-02-18 13:14