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Absolution
Forgiveness is near
If we open our hearts now
Without questioning
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Comments
RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-02-18 10:18
Yes
A simple yet, meaningful write. Forgiveness is difficult but there if we are open to it. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 10:24
Thank you for.your comments.
Thank you for.your comments. I was trying to write a Haiku using the 5 7 5 syllables
New at this trying different forms.
RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-02-18 10:39
You have
done well. I am new at writing different forms as well! This is what makes this site so great is that it is a learning workshop. We all learn from each other and give each other encouragement to try different things.
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 11:41
Absolution
Hello, Clentin,
What a beautiful message! The definition of unconditional love. I've been trying to explore the haiku realm, too, and it is more challenging than it looks! I believe this would actually be considered a senryu, which is a bit different than haiku in that it deals with human elements and emotions, whereas haiku's subject is about nature - seasons, earthly elements. You have written an inspiring piece - much to love in a brief form.
Thank you!
L
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 11:49
Thank you. I am trying to
Thank you. I am trying to explore the different types of poems.
I am not familiar with sendup?
I thought a haiku was any topic that used the 5,7,5 syllable
Form?
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 11:50
Senru! Sorry
Senru!
Sorry
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 12:00
Hi, Clentin,
There are so many wonderful, challenging, and fun poetry forms out there! You may want to look up the differences between haiku, senryu, and another called tanka - all Japanese poetry forms. I normally write free verse, so when I try a structured form, I try very hard to follow guidelines and rules to meet the challenge. There is history and culture in most forms that give us insight into the minds of poets. I could study it all day...
Again, your poem is wonderful in structure, feeling, and message! A gift to read!
L
RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-02-18 13:27
L
Thank you for explaining the difference in the types of Japanese poetry. I never realized that haiku focused on nature and senryu was for human emotions. More reasons I love this site! We learn from each other.
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 13:39
Hi, Carrie,
I can relay only what I've learned so far, which is just a drop in the sea of poetry. There are layers after layers to haiku / senryu. Clentin's poem is intriguing and very thought provoking not only in its strong message, but haiku / senryu form!
L
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 13:14
Thank you.
Thank you.
I did look up the two forms you mentioned. I will explore further.I want to try different forms even though I prefer free verse
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 13:23
Yep...
me, too!
L
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-02-18 15:51
Philosophical
Raw truth.
Very well done
Tim
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 16:05
Thank you, learning from our
Thank you, learning from our poet group. Hope to learn the various types of poetry