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Grapefruit and Sugar
For all the love I have
Of the sand and sea
The rays of the sun
The rain and the mountains...
For all the love I have
Of yellow flowers
Grapefruit and sugar
The smiles of strangers...
For all the love I have
Of snow and hot showers
Music and sweet coffee
Driving at night...
I love you
Most of all
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neopoet
Fri, 2024-02-16 02:10
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2024-02-16 04:33
Dear Kristen,
this is a really good love poem.
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Kristen H.
Fri, 2024-02-16 09:19
Thank you...
So much, Cat!
Lavender
Fri, 2024-02-16 08:49
Grapefruit and Sugar
Hello, Kristen,
Wonderful title. The entire poem is simple and sincere. Lovely.
Thank you!
L
Kristen H.
Fri, 2024-02-16 09:20
Thank you...
Very much, Lavender! I appreciate it!
Triskelion
Fri, 2024-02-16 16:24
Need to agree
..with Lavender. The title was the eye catcher for me and the expression is as sweet as...sugar on a grapefruit!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Kristen H.
Fri, 2024-02-16 17:30
Thank you...
So much, Thomas! I'm happy to hear my title is an eye catcher!