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THE CAVEMAN IN THE GLASS.
I saw him and I cowered
From the stare of his bloodshot eyes,
A scowling, hairy creature
Come from where I could but surmise.
He growled,he snarled, he drooled
As though with madness took,
He raised his hands and clutched his face
And then his head he shook.
He peered at me more closely,
Was he as shook as I?
To see this primitive creature
Hair lank, unkempt, awry.
He's gone now, gone forever
Forever and a day,
I'll ne'er set eyes on him again
Till to the mirror I do stray.
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Clentin
Mon, 2023-11-13 16:56
Very good poem with the
Very good poem with the second and last line rhyme. Great ending
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2023-11-14 11:40
Caveman
Thanks Clentin, though I say so myself, not bad for 10 minutes scribbling. Alex
Lavender
Mon, 2023-11-13 17:30
The Caveman In The Glass
Hello, Alex!
Ha! Huge grin on my face! So clever!
Nice job!
L
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2023-11-14 11:41
Caveman
Thanks L. If I can get a smile I'm happy. Alex
RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-11-13 21:46
Clever
An unexpected ending for sure! Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2023-11-14 11:42
Caveman
Thanks Rose, Always happy to please. Alex
Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-11-14 13:49
Such great fun, I love your
Such great fun, I love your descriptions. Ruby :) xx
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Alex Tanner
Tue, 2023-11-14 18:31
Hello Ruby
Thanks Ruby, it was fun to knock off. Alex