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Healing Droplets
The pain is healing;
The love is flowing;
Once again between the kids and she;
The babies were born still not in whole;
But neither in the cold;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!
She watched them grow into the different stages;
Their precious minds trying to comprehend;
Of the life they experienced;
They needed the love and assurance of both parents;
But could not fathom why not?
It became a lot;
So they just closed up;
Into their world who cares a damn;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!
They chat yet not deep;
They smiled but not wholeheartedly;
The mother saw the emptiness in their eyes;
The distance so near yet so far;
To turn back the years and see them small once more;
To bond with them is what mothers are for;
To hug them tight and wipe away their tears;
To let them feel their mother’s strength;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!
As they grow older, they saw the world through the eyes of an adult;
Then they may have felt their mother’s struggle;
Then they may have felt how hard life is to juggle;
They took their education with much deliberation and;
Made their mother proud;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!
Comments
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-17 10:10
they are healing!!!
that is energy flowing in the right direction....the opposite energy ingrown goes bad and poisons every aspect of life. they are healing...and all is right with their world...
*hugs, Cat
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Warrior Princess
Sun, 2022-07-17 18:46
Hi Candlewitch thank you for
Hi Candlewitch thank you for taking the time to read this piece and share your comment.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
c lynn brooks
Sun, 2022-07-17 11:17
3rd line her,maybe try she
3rd line her,maybe try she in there and see how that works. Poerful words the repetion works well with the word healing. Nice piece of work
Chrys
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Warrior Princess
Sun, 2022-07-17 18:49
Hi C Lynn Brooks I have
Hi C Lynn Brooks I have inserted the word she instead of her. Let me know if that is what you meant. Thank you for taking the time to read this piece, and for the compliment.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2022-07-19 22:08
Candice
Beautiful, I think now the sentence is softer. Thank you for using my suggestion
Chrys
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-17 20:24
May healing energy rally to you
Let it surround and penetrate every aspect of you and yours. I love this one!
Keep on movin’
Tim
Warrior Princess
Mon, 2022-07-18 20:14
Hi Tim glad you like this
Hi Tim glad you like this piece. Thank you for the encouraging words.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-07-18 20:23
Let me know
When you get your book finished and it’s available I’d like to purchase it. Keep up the good work and as always I stand in admiration of both your writing and you spirit.
Awesome job
Tim
Warrior Princess
Mon, 2022-07-18 20:45
Hi Tim, aww, will definitely
Hi Tim, aww, will definitely keep you in mind, and again thank you for the external support and always inspiring words. It goes a long way to propel me to push forward and improve my writing.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
RoseBlack
Sun, 2022-07-17 22:09
The healing process
From trauma is an uphill battle but you have captured the beauty of it in this poem. Great job.
~RoseBlack~
Warrior Princess
Mon, 2022-07-18 20:16
Hi RoseBlack thank you for
Hi RoseBlack thank you for your encouraging words and compliment.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
Geezer
Wed, 2022-07-20 12:51
Being a rhymer...
I will try hard not to impose my writing style on you. I will come back to this one in the near future. I see where it may be tightened up and the lines poked a bit. ~ Geezer.
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Warrior Princess
Wed, 2022-07-20 19:44
Hi Geezer understood no
Hi Geezer understood no problem. Thanks for reading this piece.
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "